Posted 1 year ago

Reading

dthao7eng130:

While reading other people’s work, I was able to find a lot of skills that was useful for my own essay paper. Peer revision is something that this class should definitely do next semester because I felt that it helped a lot. Also reading other people’s paper was very interesting. Many of the readings that we did in class before the inquiry paper were also interesteing as well.

I agree. I almost feel like we should have done more peer revision as it really gave me some good ideas for my paper.

Posted 1 year ago

Untitled: # 6

shanleylavonnejunelillianmasten:

I think my final paper could have been written a little better. I did’nt really have enough time to make it as perfect as i wanted to. In my opinion I could have done better with a little more time but it could have been worst. I would have changed the order of my paragraphs a little bit and…

I agree with you, I felt like the deadline sneaked up on me too. I thought it was interesting that the class didn’t focus on spelling and grammar, but I felt that we should have went over those concepts a little more since it’s well… an English class.

Posted 1 year ago

Untitled: The presentations for our projects that we had to do were actually...

clarissewilder:

The presentations for our projects that we had to do were actually pretty interesting and it was cool to see and learn about all the different topics that people chose to do for their paper. There was a definite variety with what has been shown in class and there are still my more presentations…

I like the idea of the e-portfolios too, it’s kind of neat to see how much you’ve accomplished over the semester.

Posted 1 year ago

Final Tumblr Post

Hello again:

So after writing my final paper I feel pretty good about how it went. It did end up not being as scientific as I wanted it, but I’ll get into that later. The writing went pretty smoothly and I didn’t seem to need to revise very much. Hopefully the teacher will like it as much as I do.

With a topic as hard to tackle as mine I think I managed to give a good common sense argument with some support from facts. I was originally planning on having more in-depth graphs and more detailed information but I soon realized that it would no longer be an 8-9 page paper if I did. There was too much information to add and if felt more like an all or nothing thing. If I heavily supported just one area and skimped on the others it would almost be better if I changed the topic of my paper to that one area. I wanted a broader coverage for my paper so I ended up taking out some of the things I were going to include. Thankfully I was able to fit it all within a reasonable page number.

The other issue was with how complicated it was getting. Now most of my sources had a ridiculous level of discourse an trying to sift through that to get to the meat of my sources was very tough. A good lot of the time I really couldn’t understand anything my sources were saying within their approx. 100 page journals. Not only did I find out that I myself didn’t completely understand somethings, I realized that I’d have to explain everything I said in my paper very delicately. I’m not writing to a specialized group of people, this paper is very general. I need to explain my paper in an easy to follow way so anyone could understand. Now on top of everything else, having to explain these more advanced topics would just suck up more time and space. I opted to take this out and make my paper rely more on common sense and a good argument. If I had more time and had to write a longer paper (that would be terrible) I would probably be able to make a more convincing paper which included more facts.

That’s probably the only area that I think my paper didn’t do to well in. It feels like I didn’t utilize my sources as well as I should have been able to, but sifting through those journals really took a lot out of me. I’m glad I was able to get anything out of them at all.

Other than that it’s been a cool semester. Writing can be fun when you pick a topic you like, and this class has been very relaxed which is refreshing when going through tougher classes.

As for my own writing, I think I have improved. I’m better at going through sources and sifting through discourse. I’m also glad I picked a very “out there” topic as it has helped me become familiar with new writing styles. If I had picked a more common topic I probably wouldn’t have been as motivated.

Thanks for the good semester.

-Brandon

Posted 1 year ago

Untitled: Daily Thoughts

aeb1193:

Since I began researching my topic on the media and how it alters how one views themselves on an outward level I have really noticed how much women are actually affected. Just walking around campus I notice how much people try to fit the “ideal” image just by the clothes that they wear. I am not…

That is a really good point. The problem is that the media doesn’t really care about that. The media will always want the best looking human beings to use, whether it’s for TV or commercials or modeling. If a company didn’t use good looking people for their advertisements and another company does, the second company gains an advantage over the first because people generally gravitate towards these “better” looks. I still agree with you though, I think it’s up to people to not idolize the people in media. It would be pretty hard to force the media to stop doing what’s in its best interests.

Posted 1 year ago

Thoughts on Discussions: Post #4

gabypress:

I really do struggle with writing. I am such a math person that English and I do not really get along most of the time. Although I really struggle with English, I am actually enjoying this class. I think it has really taught me a lot about writing. I never really liked writing before and I…

I’m much more of a math person myself so I understand how you feel about writing. It’s all about motivation for me really, if I have to write about something I don’t care about, English is the worst possible subject. If I happen to write about things I like however, English isn’t too bad. If you picked a subject you like you should end up just fine.

Posted 1 year ago

Creative Journal: Others

dthao7eng130:

I found out that everyone pretty much has similar problems with writings. There is always a problem that everyone has trouble on. Most of the time it’s citation. One of the citation that I learned that everyone did was the “hanging quote”. I thought i was the only who did that but guess not….

Citation is pretty weird. I think the main problem people have with it are the confusing rules. I personally don’t see why people can’t take a less strict stand on the matter (comma goes here, doesn’t go there, page number here, not there put two names in, not first names) and go with something that actually makes sense. Anyways hanging quotes are hand to correct for me since I usually go off of how my paper sounds, hanging quotes usually sound fine to me so they slip by.

Posted 1 year ago

Tumblr post #5

Hello again.

Well so far my inquiry paper is coming along pretty well, I don’t want to spoil anything so I won’t talk about it much. I will need to find more sources though. I need to find things that deal with other countries and dive a little further into history and trends. Doing the peer reviews has really helped me look at my own writing differently and more critically. I’m paying more attention now to how my paper “flows” than I did previously when I wrote the first couple of pages.

The peer revisions have taught me a lot about coherence and flow mostly. Before I would usually just read something and would decide whether or not it “sounded” right. I have a pretty good ear for this kind of thing so I’ve been able to get by with it for the most part. However, looking at other peoples papers is a lot easier than looking at my own, since my own bias usually blinds me from the errors I make. Reading other people’s papers and thinking about whether or not my own follows the same trends has led me to revise some things in my paper I probably would of originally left in. It’s also nice to see other people’s techniques and try to utilize them in my own paper. Most of the papers I read had nice statistics in the begging paragraph. I wasn’t originally going to try to add one of these, since it is kind of hard considering my subject, but I really like how it hooks the reader so I’ll try to see if I can fit one in.

This has taught me a lot about my own writing in general. Although it is kind of hard to explain my thoughts of my writing as once again my thoughts about myself are biased because I am… well, myself. Anyways, I think of myself as an okay writer. My strengths seem to be within the actual argument part of the paper and less so with coherence. I’ve noticed that a lot of times I know what I want to say and it’s a pretty good point, but I usually end up writing it so that it confuses other people. Sometimes I strive to be more technical or “intelligent” with my writing and all I end up doing is creating confusion and dissonance. I’ve realized that for most of the time, simplicity works wonders. By sticking to the basic ideas and arguments I’ve formed, I can do pretty well. As long as I don’t complicate the matter too much writing comes pretty easily.

Once more the only writing tip I have that is of any use to me (I mostly just write unconsciously) is to reread your paper and see if it would work in a conversation. Conversations don’t always translate into good writing, but I believe that good writing should work as a conversation. I should be able to read you a well-written paper and it should make sense verbally just as it does visually. This is a good test for flow and coherence. I personally work better audibly than visually so my ear usually picks up on things that my eyes miss. Stuff may look good on paper, but does it sound good? When I apply this concept I usually end up rooting out a lot of stuff that wasn’t very coherent. Since flow and coherence usually challenge me the most, this concept helps me out a lot.

:3

Posted 2 years ago
aferguson7:

awagoner3:

I don’t want people to get the wrong idea when I post this picture because it isn’t me taking an aggressive stance on the issue one way or another. The purpose of this illustration is to demonstrate the power that Facebook has in our daily lives. I know I don’t speak for everyone when I say this, but I used to spend so much of my day on Facebook. It was ridiculous. Back in high school, during the night time, I could literally sit at my computer and drift through my Facebook for hours; chatting occasionally with people and   once in a while adding a new “friend.” The point being that I lost a boat load of valuable and potentially productive time to Facebook. But like I’ve stated this isn’t the case with everyone so now I will present some statistics of Facebook usage and what would happen if it disappeared. Obizmedia states the following statistics about Facebook in their presentation A World Without Facebook “The average Facebook visit is approximately 23 minutes.” Okay, let us back up for a second; If the average Facebook user visits Facebook approximately 90 times a month and each time they visit they stay about 23 minutes, that is an average time spent on Facebook per month of 2,070 minutes (90x23). Dang!!!!….and that is only taking account of the times the user creates material on Facebook, that’t is not even the time the user is just checking his feed, looking at other profiles, etc. “The average user creates 90 pieces of material on Facebook every month.” “In 1600 AD there was 545 million inhabitants on this planet, Facebook as of 2010 had ~600 million users.” (hitechanalogy.com) WOW! That is pretty shocking. If there is a relation to my topic through this, it is that the misrepresentation of identity on Facebook is so widely accepted and present in the users. Who knows, maybe it is the boredom from sitting at your computer or waiting for that post from a friend that is causing a mental shift in the users, thus causing them to alter their portrayal of self. 

I really like this picture because its so true, I speak for myself when I say people are ADDICTED to Facebook. I have to admit I sign in every morning and check and then there is times where I will be on Facebook for hours and not even notice. I mean don’t get me wrong I think Facebook is great for keeping in contact with friends and what not, but cmon we have the outdoors and we have lots of other things we can be doing with our day then sitting in our rooms and being obsessive about a social network. 

Yeah I agree this is kind of out of hand. I use Facebook myself and don’t see much wrong with it. I mostly use it to keep in contact with people I don’t usually see. At most I get on for about 5 minutes every couple of days to check things. I find it odd that people constantly stare at it for so long. It would be good if people cut back in their use of this and it goes to show that Facebook only has power over you if you let it. It can be perfectly useful if you don’t obsess over it.

aferguson7:

awagoner3:

I don’t want people to get the wrong idea when I post this picture because it isn’t me taking an aggressive stance on the issue one way or another. The purpose of this illustration is to demonstrate the power that Facebook has in our daily lives. I know I don’t speak for everyone when I say this, but I used to spend so much of my day on Facebook. It was ridiculous. Back in high school, during the night time, I could literally sit at my computer and drift through my Facebook for hours; chatting occasionally with people and   once in a while adding a new “friend.” The point being that I lost a boat load of valuable and potentially productive time to Facebook. But like I’ve stated this isn’t the case with everyone so now I will present some statistics of Facebook usage and what would happen if it disappeared. Obizmedia states the following statistics about Facebook in their presentation A World Without Facebook “The average Facebook visit is approximately 23 minutes.” Okay, let us back up for a second; If the average Facebook user visits Facebook approximately 90 times a month and each time they visit they stay about 23 minutes, that is an average time spent on Facebook per month of 2,070 minutes (90x23). Dang!!!!….and that is only taking account of the times the user creates material on Facebook, that’t is not even the time the user is just checking his feed, looking at other profiles, etc. “The average user creates 90 pieces of material on Facebook every month.” “In 1600 AD there was 545 million inhabitants on this planet, Facebook as of 2010 had ~600 million users.” (hitechanalogy.com) WOW! That is pretty shocking. If there is a relation to my topic through this, it is that the misrepresentation of identity on Facebook is so widely accepted and present in the users. Who knows, maybe it is the boredom from sitting at your computer or waiting for that post from a friend that is causing a mental shift in the users, thus causing them to alter their portrayal of self. 

I really like this picture because its so true, I speak for myself when I say people are ADDICTED to Facebook. I have to admit I sign in every morning and check and then there is times where I will be on Facebook for hours and not even notice. I mean don’t get me wrong I think Facebook is great for keeping in contact with friends and what not, but cmon we have the outdoors and we have lots of other things we can be doing with our day then sitting in our rooms and being obsessive about a social network. 

Yeah I agree this is kind of out of hand. I use Facebook myself and don’t see much wrong with it. I mostly use it to keep in contact with people I don’t usually see. At most I get on for about 5 minutes every couple of days to check things. I find it odd that people constantly stare at it for so long. It would be good if people cut back in their use of this and it goes to show that Facebook only has power over you if you let it. It can be perfectly useful if you don’t obsess over it.

Posted 2 years ago
vcasottienglish130:

awagoner3:

My topic summed up in one picture….

This is a great picture to capture the truths of facebook. Funny but very true and sort of depressing how this actually happens. Great picture for your topic

Haha, this picture makes a funny point. I agree that this does happen a lot, but at the same time I do see a lot of people who don’t do this. I’m interested to see how your paper goes.

vcasottienglish130:

awagoner3:

My topic summed up in one picture….

This is a great picture to capture the truths of facebook. Funny but very true and sort of depressing how this actually happens. Great picture for your topic

Haha, this picture makes a funny point. I agree that this does happen a lot, but at the same time I do see a lot of people who don’t do this. I’m interested to see how your paper goes.